Some people think that the fiction violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment other disagree and think that it encourages violent bheaviour discuss both view and give your opinion

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Both the given
option
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options
have
there
of them or themselves
their
merit and demerit
hence
the choice become many people believe that television
violence
is
very debatable issue
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a very debatable issue
in our modern society
.
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.
where
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Where
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
argue that showing
this
violent
pecture
a visual representation (of an object or scene or person or abstraction) produced on a surface
picture
pictures
or movies would encourage the
sam
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
bheaviour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
in
society
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society, however
however
, personally I think there are more positive and negative point
this
assay and I am writing to following paragraph
On
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In
the
first
place in order to validate my thought there are numerical reason
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.
the
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The
first
reason it
would be understand
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would understand
would be understood
that the most action that make every scene of
block buster
a large bomb used to demolish extensive areas (as a city block)
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more interesting and attractive.
However
, watching program involves
range
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a range
of Consequences that may spoil not only viewers
life but
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life, but
also
those surrounding who are adjacent to him. ON other side the
violence
demostile
by TV is not the main reason that encourages people for similar
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
that is
why it is incorrect to blame only tv for
violence
among youngsters
violence
in spite of its fictional is not absolute harmless entertainment as it is supposed In conclusion modern program
violence
on tv screen have a significant on
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
with week
mantaily
of or occurring or payable every month
monthly
who are exposed mostly
.
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.
I hope that media will provide less
violence
and
more positive program
Suggestion
a more positive program
more positive programs
which will become new propagation for young people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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