Some people think that the fiction violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment other disagree and think that it encourages violent bheaviour discuss both view and give your opinion

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violence

very debatable issue

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a very debatable issue

in our modern society

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Where

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argue that showing

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a visual representation (of an object or scene or person or abstraction) produced on a surface

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pictures

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closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree

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bheaviour

manner of acting or controlling yourself

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behaviours

society

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society, however

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would understand

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more interesting and attractive.

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a range

of Consequences that may spoil not only viewers

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why it is incorrect to blame only tv for

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I hope that media will provide less

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a more positive program

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

211 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that the fiction violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment other disagree and think that it encourages violent bheaviour discuss both view and give your opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?