The diagrams below show the site of school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the site of school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
These two maps illustrate the
school
site in 2004 and the plan for changes to the
school
site in 2024.
Overall
, the construction layout of the
school
site would have
some
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undergo noticeable changes in the future years. In 2004, after entering the main entrance, it is
easily
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to
found
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a
path
separate
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separating
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the
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school
building 1 and
school
building 2. And keep walking
alone
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along
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the
path
, we can approach the sports
filed
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field
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. But it has a big difference in 2024, a passage which used to connect two original buildings would be added and the
path
would be cut off by
this
passage.
At the end
of the
path
, the sports field would be replaced by a
school
building 3. At the right of
the
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school
building 3,
it
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will set up a new
car
parking place and get a
newly
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path
to connect
the
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car
park 2 and the old
car
park. What’s more, near
by
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the
car
park, a new sports field would be established which
smaller
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than the
last
one.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, path, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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