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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
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male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 at Burnaby Public Library in the period of three years from 2011 and 2014.
Overall
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, as can be seen from the
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chart
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,
men
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 had the lowest proportion (3000
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) in 2011.
However
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, in 2014 the total number of
men
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 reading
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 was higher than
women
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,
14000
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with 14000
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books
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 compared with 8000
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. The
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 of
men
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 reading
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 increased slightly from 3000 to 4000
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 between 2011 and 2012.
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 the same period,
women
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 had an upward trend from 5000 to 8000
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.
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 2012 to 2013, there was a sharp growth of
men
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 reading
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 from 4000 to 10000
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.
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,
women
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 made up a slow rise from 8000 to 10000
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 at the same time. In consecutive years 2013 and 2014, the proportion of
men
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 reading
books
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 had a significant climb from 10000 to 14000
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.
On the contrary
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, the
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 of
women
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 experienced a sudden drop from 10000 to 8000
books
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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