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TOPIC: Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While to some people, teaching separately male and female is more beneficial, others say that boys and girls should study in mixed schools. In my opinion, I believe that it is better to let them learn in varied institutes. On the one hand, it is thought that learning in dissimilar schools has many advantages. The main reason for
that
is men
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is, men
 and females are completely two different sexes, which needs different environments for them to adapt. If studying in the same school, especially with secondary pupils, they may tend to feel embarrassed and shy as it is their puberty period, which causes many changes physically and mentally.
On the other hand
, many people argue that boys and girls should learn in selfsame schools. They can be able to play, collaborate and help each other in many works. It is not a bad idea when we have a chance to discover our friends, from that having more knowledge about our friends' human biologically.
Furthermore
, being taught in the same school can make a friendly and active environment. It is even essential when our society is becoming more and more lukewarm and indifferent. I believe that with an amicable and collaborative educational medium, boys and girls can entirely grow perfectly in the future. In conclusion,
although
 separate institutes have many advantages, I think that mixed schools should be developed more because we can create a better studying environment for both men and females.
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