The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The pie chart depicts the consequences of people who lived in Britain visiting famous places
such
as Wildlife Parks and Zoo, Historic houses and monuments, Museum and galleries and
Theme
Parks
particularly
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in 1999.
Initially
, a
theme
park
was the most prominent and popular visiting place among all others because it had the maximum number of visitors. In the
theme
park
, there were five different
division
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which
mostly
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occupied by tourists. Almost half of the tourists went to Blackpool pleasure beach
while
Chessington world of adventure and Legoland had shown
lease
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less
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popular
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and
maintain
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a similar percentage. The pleasure land
which
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was slightly lesser by one
percent
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than Alton and both had under twenty. By following
theme
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the theme
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park
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parks
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,
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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and Galleries has recorded
the
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second
popular
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tourist place which was almost similar to
park
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the park
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visitor’s
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ratio and less than quatre was visiting Historic houses and wildlife
park
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parks
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.
Overall
,
although
theme
park
tourist place was widely popular in Britain, Zoos was
least
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popular among all others.
Others region
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were maintaining a decent number of visitors.
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