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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

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There are some people supporting the opinion that countries should not spend their funds on railways and they have to develop existing facilities and old public network.I side with those who opine that dedicate some proportion of budget to extend the railway network and make new ones is essential.
On the other hand
, it is thought by many that our old transportation system should be developed and we need to renovate old buses and trains and use them again. Since it helps governments to save their money and spend that on more important matters,
such
 as health
,
Accept space
,
environments and safe issues.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
 encouraged governments to economize energy resources
also
 it leads to decrease the of CO2 emissions.
On the other hand
, some people, including me believe that there are some significant reasons which obligate governments to expand public transit system.
Firstly
, railway enlargement encourages people to use trains or metros,
hence
 it helps governments to gain a lot of money and use that on some vital issues.
Secondly
, conveyance development helps the environment to fight with air pollution and those kinds of smokes, which exit from cars and automobiles by burning fuels in their engines.
Thirdly
, if the railway lines expand,
then
 the percentage of traffic jam and congestion in metropolitan will be decreased. In conclusion,
although
 some people think old railways should be reused, I think it is necessary for expanding public transit and convey system because it has a lot of advantages
also
 it is beneficial for our city that provides easy access to everywhere.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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