The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
The line graph compares four sectors in terms of the
amount
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number
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of
acid
rain
emissions
that they produced over a period of 17 years in the UK.
It is clear that
the total amount of
acid
rain
emissions
in the UK fell considerably between 1990 and 2007. The most dramatic decrease was seen in the electricity, gas and water supply
sector
. In 1990, around 3.3
million
tonnes
of
acid
rain
emissions
came from the electricity, gas and water
sector
. The transport and communication
sector
was
respondible
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responsible
for about 0.7
million
tonnes
of
emissions
,
while
the domestic
sector
produced around 0.6
million
tonnes
. Just over 2
million
tonnes
of
acid
rain
gases came from other industries.
Emissions
from electricity, gas and water supply fell dramatically to only 0.5
million
tonnes
in 2007, a drop of almost 3
million
tonnes
.
While
acid
rain
gases from the domestic
sector
and other industries fell gradually, the transport
sector
saw a small increase in
emissions
, reaching a peak of 1
million
tonnes
in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words acid, rain, emissions, sector, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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