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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates different types of indie
films
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 produced in both British and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Ireland in 2012. It shows the releases in each genre of indie
films
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 and the percentage of
profit
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the profit
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 which they received thanks to selling tickets.
Overall
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, there is
incompatibility
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an incompatibility
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 between the number of
films
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 and the fraction of ticket consumption.
Although
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 Dramas and Documentaries were the most produced
film
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 genres, their income was lower than Biopic
film
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 which was made only
one
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once
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 in the year of 2012. In detail, Drama and Documentary
films
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recorded
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were recorded
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 as the top scorer in the pattern of
films
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,
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with the
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the
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a
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 similar number at 35, each accounted for 23.6% of all productions. It was followed by Comedies
that
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which
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 constituted 17.6% with 26
films
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 out of total
148
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of 148
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 releases.
On the other hand
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, only a singer biopic
film
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 was public, it earned 9.1%
on
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of
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 the whole revenue. In terms of the segment of
ticket
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tickets
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 consumed, the Great Britain and Ireland population showed their interest in Comedy
films
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 which gained 45.4%
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of ticket’s
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ticket’s
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ticket
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 profit, becoming the highest revenue
films
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 category. With respect to the
second
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popular
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most popular
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 2012
film
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 - Horror, it took a record
of
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apply
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20.2% of the domestic market.
By contrast
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, the income of Documentary, Crime, Action and Thriller
films
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 reached
at
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apply
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a mere 5%
each
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for each
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 form of independent
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films
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film
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. Romance represented the least popularity with only 0.8%
in
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at
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 the same time.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, film with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independent films
  • box office earnings
  • genre
  • budget
  • dramatic increase
  • niche market
  • experimental cinema
  • diversification
  • profitability
  • audience interest
  • investment in film industry
  • low-budget films
  • high-budget films
  • release trends
  • performance metrics
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