I’ll be free some evenings and one weekend. I want to make the most of this opportunity, so I’d like your advice please: where to go, what to do, and why?

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Hi, Chris! Congratulations on getting a new job! And it is great you are

finally

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getting a chance to

visit

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our town. First of all, you absolutely need to

visit

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our new waterpark ,

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Aqua 3000”, it’s got all the awesome waterslides, the most amazing shapes and heights. We have different kinds of saunas there as well

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if you fancy. As it is winter already, visiting the waterpark can be a nice opportunity to relax and warm your bones a little.

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, I would advise you to

visit

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our new 5D cinema. I remember, you

have

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told me once you’d really love to

visit

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one of those, well, here is your chance! It is an exciting and unforgettable experience, you’ll be sitting in a moving chair,

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the wind or even water dripping down on your head. I know you are a big fan of horror movies, and our cinema has a large choice of them. On your free

weekend

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you should

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our famous club ,

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31/11”. At the time of your

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there will be performing an awesome DJ Skream, you have probably heard of him. The club itself is a superb place to hang out

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and

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dance. The bartender makes the most delicious cocktails in the world, I swear. I hope some of my suggestions will

proof

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useful to you.

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on one of your free evenings you will find time to stop by my house and we’ll have a nice chat about your new job. Take care, Julia

Thu May 07 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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253 words

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write a letter to your facebook friend,in this letter tell him about news happening in your country tell why people into this tell why you into this

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