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Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some pre
centage of
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percentage
 people believe that to be an effective spo
rtsperson, o
ne need to have a nature capability. Other cot
egories of
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
categories
 people think that, hard training and practice are more important. On the one hand, today in our cou
ntry there ar
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country, there
e many tal
anted at
endowed with talent or talents
talented
hletes. Some people argue that being a professional athlete is an innate ability. Needless to say, if we look at the history of some tal
anted pe
endowed with talent or talents
talented
ople who play sports they have indigenous capacity, because their descendants, exactly to say, their parents or relatives are
also
 well known representatives in
this
 area as tal
anted on
endowed with talent or talents
talented
e.
Also
, some scientists say that, it
ca
it is
it's
lled a natural faculty which pass from generation to generation. An example of
this
, our spo
rtmasters wh
o have achieved several high results without any hes
itatio.
indecision in speech or action
hesitation
hesitate
For example
, the world boxing champion Shakhram Giyosov. His father insists that, it is a natural ability for him to suc
ced in
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
this
. Because both his father and grandfather were professional boxers.
On the other hand
, some people say with confidence that, the secret being strong and experienced spo
rtmaster is
 definitely a regular workout. As I mentioned above, others view is different and can be an exception. Spo
trs ex
Suggestion
Sports
Sports'
perts say, that natural aptitude is not suf
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Suggestion
sufficiently
perienced. To be become a professional, you need to do exercise regularly and wor
khard on
Suggestion
work hard
 yourself. I support my opinion with following example. Who is famous and experienced in
this
 field. Leo Messi has been interested in football young age and has been involved in the sport on a regular basis. As well as these efforts have brought him fame and professional experience. To sum up, I think only the natural ability to be a master of sports is not enough. I believe that, the best way to become a successful is doing exercise and working much on yourself.

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