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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has been an ongoing debate about the increasing population of the
nation
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.
However
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,
this
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 will
also
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 add the concern for the rising the number of youths compared to the elderly people. I agree with the notion having manifold irrefutable points and few demerits. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in below paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, the predominant merit
for
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of
 having
large number
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a large number
large numbers
 of adolescents is that the
nation
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 can grow their prestige over the globe. As
the younger
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the young
 person
are
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is
 more capable
who having
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who, having
 the dynamic personality. They can expand the glory of the
nation
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 by doing the new research.
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, the authority should
also
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 relax as their citizen having
healthy life
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a healthy life
. They can spend their money and time for the development not on the health care.
For example
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, many manufacturing companies
has increased
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have increased
 their production capabilities having more youth as their employee.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 diversity having few detrimental impacts on the
nation
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. The
first
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 demerit is that younger one never finds the correct direction. As
this
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 person are not much mature to take
decision
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a decision
. So, if the elder
are
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is
present
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present, then
then
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 they guide them by using their experience of life.
Furthermore
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, the youth has to live
alone having
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alone, having
 no family support.
This
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 will create a gloomy impact
to
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in
 their mind as the family would provide support which helps to reduce the stress as well.
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, most of the youngsters
has started
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have started
 to drink as they feel
alone having
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alone, having
 no one who will take care of them. In conclusion, there are many positive points which outweigh the disadvantages of having
large number
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a large number
large numbers
 of youths compared to the elder.
This
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 will help the
nation
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 to excel their economy and give focus on the development.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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