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Some people believe that the government should make laws regarding nutrition and healthy lifestyle, while others think that it is a matter of personal responsibility. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, some people are thinking that bureaucrat must take seriously concerning how to improve human
health
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.
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, other people are anti regarding
this
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 statement, for they are thinking that
masses
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the masses
 must follow a healthy lifestyle by themselves.
well
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
Well
, here I would like to discuss both views in my fourth paragraph. On the one side of the coin, some mortals who are uneducated and illiterate do not have adequate insight about how to live a healthy life,
therefore
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 rules, and regulations may be made by the authority in order to ameliorate human
health
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.
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consequently
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Consequently
, the government's
law
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 can be followed by citizens
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,
although
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 people and their juvenile well-educated, they
are preferring
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prefer
 to eat unhealthy foods
such
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 as junk
food
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, fast
food
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, street
food
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 in lieu of homemade
food
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 as
masses
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the masses
 get
this
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food
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 at an economical price with the delicious test, owing to competitive world,
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 strictly
law
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 must be selected by the administration with a view to improving the unhealthy community.
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law
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Law
 of government is
peerless way
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a peerless way
the peerless way
 to increase people's awareness. On the other side of the coin, India is an independent country.
every
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Every
 person has their individual choice,
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 the
law
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 enforcement agency does not force to follow a healthy life. People ought to understand their
health
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 and fitness by themselves because it is a personal responsibility. Notwithstanding the
law
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 of administration, some people do not follow
this
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law
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 as long as they will understand the value of good
health
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 by themselves. To conclude,
health
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 is wealth,
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 the government must take action against
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 problem.
mortal
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The mortal
Mortal
 must root for administration,
as a result
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, society will become a
health
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-conscious.
a
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A
 healthy society is a great breakthrough for all of us.
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