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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss both advantages and disadvantages

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There are many different types of pollution problems on the world, but the
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 pollution is one of the major issues in
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 modern era. People assert that authorities have to make hard laws to
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 the
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 pollution become it has really bad impact of many people's lives. Some of the major pros and cons discussed in following paragraphs.
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, The biggest effect of loud
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 has on those individuals, who is suffering from serious diseases related to brain and hearing problems because they do not have ability to heal itself. To exemplify, the study of The United Kingdom university showed that the number of patient's related many hearing issues has increased by 70% from
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last 2 decades
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 because of the increments of
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 created by humans From the viewpoint of education, we often see the a large number of students cannot focus on their studies due to sound infection because they feel difficult reading any books.
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, In many undeveloped countries most schools are close to industrial areas and some regional places. Which makes a huge amount of
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 disturb children during studies.
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, we can ignore the a few advantages of
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 because some of the businesses cannot work with loud
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.
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, construction workers use heavy machines to make road and building, So it's hard for them to produce no
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.
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, RadioRJ and singers mostly sing in a loud voice when the are totally lost in their soul of music. To illustrate, we usually saw that on the every live concert a big DJ system comes to singers. At that time we cannot
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 the emotional feeling of people At the end, it's an irrefutable fact that
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 is the cause of the many problems, But but not only with the strict rules we can
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 person should
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 do their job to
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