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When recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
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In today's global world, people obtain enormous post
work
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experience
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 and graduated recent qualifications. When it's comes to in the hiring process, employees are pointing out the mental abilities and basic personal qualities of their
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employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employer
employee
. In
this
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 case, both points are required to be get hired, but at some point metal abilities are more preferable rather than individual quality.
First
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 and foremost,
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employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
 attitude is play important role in their growth and incremental status in
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company
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the company
. Basic quality
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 as - polite nature, quick learner and punctual.
For example
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, a CSR of any
company
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 always having conversations with their clients or customers.
Thus
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,
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company
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the company
a company
companies
 recommends that he or she should be deliver correct information with polite tone.
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 kind of quality employers expecting their employees.
Secondly
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, individual's aptitude level are more important rather than personal qualities. An
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employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employer
 who obtained higher qualifications and technical
experience
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 is an essential for
job
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work
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.
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Employe
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The employee
Employee
An employee
Employees
Employer
 can esteem own skills on the
job
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 and give his or her best to the
company
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.
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, certain jobs need previous
work
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experience
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 which has related to the present
work
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. Which means
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employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employee
 can deliver expected service to the
company
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's clients. Namely, an Inspection
job
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 that the inspector should be have appropriate knowledge about their inspection tools, how to use it. And, gained ample
experience
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 to use inspection techniques which are resulting factor at the end, whether that object is acceptable or rejectable. To conclude, requirements are
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first priority
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the first priority
 to any
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employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employer
employees
 that would diagnose their personal
work
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 attitude. Because attitude can be changed while on
job
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work but
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work, but
 an appropriate
experience
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 and theoretical knowledge can't be gained as
quick
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quickly
 as possible.
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