The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
The bar graph illustrates the average number of
car
journeys
per day in the city centre divided by residents and
non-residents
between 1996 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
resident
Correct quantifier usage
number of resident
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car
travellers
were
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apply
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decreased numbers rather than
non-residents
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non-resident
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car
journeys
increased
total
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in total
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during the whole period. In 1996, the number of
car
journeys
had below 10000 per day made by
resident
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residents
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however
, almost half
number
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the number
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of the
journeys
had made by
non-residents
. After
following
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the following
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three years,
resident
car
travellers
were almost
same
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the same
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while
non-
resident
car
journeys
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased trend and
which
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apply
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had more than 8000
journeys
per day in 1999. In early 2000, parking meters
introduced
Add a missing verb
were introduced
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into the city centre and
that
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at that
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time in
a
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the
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city, local
travellers
had almost half means 5000
journeys
had slightly decreased as compared to 1999
travellers
. After
than
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that
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both
journeys
which same
in
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apply
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until
to
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apply
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2002. In late 2002,
westage
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wastage
street and pork late closed to traffic. In 2003, both
are
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apply
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journeys
had drastically decreased, residents
car
journeys
were made in 4000,
whereas
others had 3000. Until 2005,
resident
traffic
slightly
Add a missing verb
was slightly
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up or down, rather
non-residents
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non-resident
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traffic had
also
remain
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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and in 2005
which
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it
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had approximately 5000 per
days
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day
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, journeys, non-residents, resident, travellers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • urban planning
  • traffic management
  • regulate
  • measures
  • impact
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • explore
  • evaluate
  • potential
  • journey
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