Question:- Over the past 50 years, young people gain status and power but old people have lost.What is the cause and it is a good or bad development?

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It is irrefutable that

today almost

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today, almost

all fields

have dominated

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dominate

by young people, even in politics, technology and financial positions

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According to me, it is a good development because of gain in knowledge and wisdom. I would like to explicate my point of view in

upcoming paragraphs

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the upcoming paragraphs

. Indeed

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there are myriad reasons behind the change of power from old generation to the young is higher education. The young people are energetic and vigorous. Most of them have received a formal University education, where they gained knowledge, skills and experience

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absolutely essential to their future careers. For epitomize, the people in

the higher

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highest

the highest

level in almost all the fields like Bill Gates

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Barack Obama and the direct of Microsoft are highly educated from

reputative

repetitive and persistent

repetitive

institutes.

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, they are aware of the present situation and know how to face a threat. Expanding the statements

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compared with

young

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the younger

generation, old people's knowledge is out-

dated which

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dated, which

does not fit in with the growth of the current society. Old people respond slower than young people, who can always make quick judgements and prompt decisions.

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but

the not least,

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not least, the

young counterparts have extraordinary spirit and high risk taking attitude which is needed for companies to grow. For

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an occurrence of something

instance

instances

, in the manufacturing sectors, the use of advanced machines is quite

simple but

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simple, but

how to operate the equipments could be a tough challenge for older workers.

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, sometimes the elderly employees might suffer both physically and psychologically. To conclude

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I reiterate my opinion saying that the emergence of

young generation

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the young generation

a young generation

as a power behind an organisation is a good development.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

264 words

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Question:- Over the past 50 years, young people gain status and power but old people have lost.What is the cause and it is a good or bad development?

Fully explain your ideas

Discus the advantage and disadvantages of the studying on abroad

Your next door owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Most people could not go to work in quarantine period and stayed at home due to the Covid-19 pandemic. What problems lockdown may arise, and how can these problems be tackled.