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The bar chart gives infornamtion about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives infornamtion about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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The graph illustrates the
car
journeys
 made per day by the residents and the non-residents over the period of 10
years
 between 1996 and 2005.
Overall
, the number of
car
journeys
 of the residents in the
city
center
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at
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 the initial four
years
 where significantly higher,
whereas
 the non-resident’s daily
car
journeys
 gradually got increased after
year
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the year
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 1999
due to
 2 rules introduced into the
city
.
Although
, for both
type
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types
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 of
the
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residents, their
car
journeys
 were considerably higher
at
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in
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 the initial
years
, later got reduced effectively by the
year
 2005. In the
year
 1996, the average number of
car
journeys
 per day was highest
around
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 9900 as seen in the graph which was slightly lessened
about
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 45-50% up to 5000 in the successive
years
 after the parking meters were introduced into the
city
center
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centre
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 in 1999.
However
, they reduced the
car
journeys
 down to
average
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an average
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 of 4000 in 2005 as Westgate street and Park lane was ceased to traffic.
On the other hand
, the average count of
the
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car
journeys
 was seen as 5000 and had tended to increase significantly which got
stabled
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 for a
while
. Though, the number of
journeys
 got highly reduced to around 3000 in the
year
 2003 after immediate predestined rules in the
city
 but was evidently more compared to resident’s
car
journeys
 in the final
year
 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, journeys, years, city, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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