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the first care appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 millions vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transports should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The use of cars as a means of shipping is gaining serious popularity. While some are of the opinion that other modes of shipment ought to be encouraged and international rules placed on
car
 owners and users. I totally agree with
this
 opinion because the use of other means of transport will lead to
reduction
Suggestion
a reduction
 in traffic congestion and controlled
car
 ownership and usage would tackle the problem of environmental pollution. On the one hand, resorting to other forms of transport would reduce traffic congestion caused by millions of motor cars plying the major roads.
For example
, the introduction of air and water transports has drastically
bring
Suggestion
brought
 about fewer people using vehicles as these two means of transportation tend to be faster.
Furthermore
, placing strict rules on
car
 owners and users will not just bring about a decline in the number of vehicles, but will address the issue of environmental pollution caused by carbon emissions from exhaust fumes.
This
 is to say that as owning a
car
 is restricted to few essential
person
Suggestion
persons
 for essential reasons, the environment becomes healthier. In conclusion, I totally agree that the government should encourage other methods of transportation and stringent rules placed on owning and using a
car
.
This
 is because they both lead to
reduction
Suggestion
a reduction
 in traffic congestion and pollution respectively.
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