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Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world. Other people, however, believe that scientists have the greatest influence. Discuss both of views and give your opinion

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It is irrefutable that both scientists and politicians have made great contributions to the societies worldwide and it would be difficult to say whose influence is greater. In the following paragraphs, I would highlight the role of both, politicians and scientists in our lives. Politicians are elected by citizens to work for the betterment of the masses by enforcing regulations to maintain social harmony and law and order in the country. They represent the common man and do their best so that no one is devoid of their fundamental rights. They
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 represent their countries in matters where global cooperation is needed. They have the power to change the standing of their nation in the whole
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, the economic policies of our Prime Minister, Manmohan Singh have brought India way up in the eyes of the whole
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. On the other hand the
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 of scientists cannot be
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. They have made great progress in the field of medicine. Today, there is a cure for many fatal diseases
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 as cancers. Scientists all over the
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 are toiling wholeheartedly to find a cure for problems
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 as AIDS. It is the
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 of scientists that we have electricity and the automobile. The
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 of scientists in the field of communication has shrunk the whole planet Earth into a global village. The satellite TV and the internet have brought the
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 into the common man‘s bedroom. Because of scientists‘
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, education has reached the remotest corners of the
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, thereby reducing the gap between the rich and the poor. Scientists are working on fighting global warming. They are working on space tourism and exploring other planets for evidence of life. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
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 that no doubt, politicians are very important for people but the
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 of scientists is much more. They have converted yesterday‘s fiction into today‘s reality

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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