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Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent year, housing shortages have been increasing in large cities. Some people believe that only government action can solve
this
 problem.
However
, I strongly believe that there are many ways to due to lake of accommodation. We must acknowledge that family background is essential for living.
This
 is because parents always give the best education for their children as much as they can effort.
For example
, parents let their kids go to a private school that can meet the best opportunity.
As a result
, children will become successful adults in their life, and they can have their habitation. Another fact to note is that the large estate company in main cities has always created projects that support homeless.
This
 is based on the face that high income’s company wants to help people that they can have their own house.
For instance
, many houses have built in major cities by estate company that they sale very cheap price for poor people. For
this
 reason,
this
 is the best opportunity that low income earner can reach their house.
However
, it should be noted that government c
on not t
Suggestion
doesn't take
ake action to solve housing shortages without companies
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