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What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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In the salad days of the millennium, several people are purchasing things from online rather than the local shops around
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Seemingly
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this
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 A lion share of people agrees to
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 and some others have an aversion to
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 trend.Both people and Government should take initiatives to tackle the extinction of the local shops.The following paragraphs will discuss the pros and cons of online shopping. We are living in the era of consumerism and the modern thrown away culture played a significant part in the accelerated demands of people
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Subsequently
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the competitions are becoming the brawl rather than being sprint.
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, more and more companies have been promoting their stores online and people are finding it as an easy solution to manage their time and money.
Therefore
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 most of the local shops are struggling to survive and
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 it’s affecting the local advertise and economy. Having said that
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the solution needs to be addressed.
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the government should intervene and initiate policies which could help the survival of
locals
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local
 shops.When
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 big corporate enter into an economy,
govt
 policies should protect the local market
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For instance
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Chinese government policies preventing big
corporates
 to penetrate their
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market, hence
hence
 their local economy is thriving in opulence. Local shops should introduce more attractive prices to their customer rather than what people are getting it in online. To conclude
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, it is always people’s liberty that what they want to buy and from where the want it.Online shopping is convenient in large extent, though, there will be limitations as well.Price and quality matters when someone
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purchases
 something.
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, to protect the local shopping, culture would be influenced by government policies and local market price in some extent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • sustainability
  • supply chain
  • artisan
  • homegrown
  • locally sourced
  • community spirit
  • consumer behavior
  • environmental impact
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • awareness campaign
  • strategic partnership
  • brand trust
  • quality assurance
  • transparent sourcing
  • incentives
  • loyalty programs
  • farmers' market
  • local fair
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