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Some people think that employers should ensure a supportive and pleasant work environment where each employee is respected and valued equally while others think employers should focus instead on providing better facilities and equipment.

A positive
work
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environment
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 has a great influence on employees' achievements and a
company
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's success. Most of people advocate that the employers should create a positive and caring working atmosphere for employees while others argued that they should facilitate them with materialistic things. In
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 essay, I will shed some light on both the views before giving my opinion.
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, As we know that the
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 impression is the
last
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 impression. Materialistic things
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 as office phone, laptop, private office, travel cover and other
work
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 services is a key to attract workers to join and stay with the
company
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 for the longer term. Availability of these facilities changes employees' attitude to do projects faster for the
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 to ensure the success of an organization.
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, a recent study at Toronto university showed that some companies in greater Toronto area give their employees free laptops to complete office
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. Around 80 percent of workers completed their projects with more enthusiasm by putting extra efforts before deadlines.
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 all leads to change employee attitude towards
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 and made them satisfied with their
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. On the other side, cooperative and peaceful working
environment
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 is very important at
work
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-site. All employees want their colleagues to supportive and easy going boss to do
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 with enthusiasm. It is true that friendly and caring atmosphere reduces stress at workplaces and it is essential for the success of
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ompany.
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the company
a company
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, workers will stay for long term if they have low level stress on the
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.
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 to
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, a positive recognition by supervisor or boss influence workers to
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 in a perfect way. To illustrate, a recent study by "Toronto Sun" newspaper showed that Amazon
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 holds weekly meetings to discuss best strategies to increase warehouse production and take feedback from employees to make friendly
environment
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. It leads to reduce the number of retentions in a
company
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. To sum up,
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 materialistic facilities attract employees to do
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ob
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the job
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jobs
with more efforts, but, friendly and supportive
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 ensures a low level stress among employees. In my opinion, employees should put more effort to ensure a cooperative and supportive atmosphere at workplace because it makes employees' to stay for long term at
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.

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