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whether it is possible to take a vacation from your problems.

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Today we have an interesting topic to talk about. Whether it’s possible to get away from our problems.
This
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 lingering behaviour is not practical solution
however
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. We are required to fix our problems before they get even bigger. Observing around
us we
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us, we
 are filled with many issues throughout our lives. We keep on clearing one after the other. As Delaying
them
people in general
they
 will create unnecessary worry and stress in our minds.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 rather than, getting away from
problem
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the problem
a problem
 we have to confront them using all possible resources we have
.
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.
 It
also
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 brings utter satisfaction when we get through these hurdles.
This
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 brings us learning and experience within us. Many people have
learnt
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learned
 a habit of delaying their personal problems due to which they face many other consequences. They are treated as irresponsible and faithful for future tasks. People start even loosing trust
overtime
Suggestion
over time
. Some events or situations are accidental like sickness
,
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,
death we
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death, we
 cannot do anything over
them but
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them, but
 at least the ones that are in our hands like stuck in bad Job, no interest in studying, stuck in
bad marriage
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a bad marriage
bad marriages
, we should try to fix them.
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, I would restate that getting away from problems is not a long-term solution but short lived happiness.
we
Suggestion
We
 need to resolve it
someday or
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someday, or
 the other. Sooner the better.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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