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Education is the single most important factor in the development of a country do you agree.

#education #factor #development #country
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Advancement of a
country
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 is not totally relying on
education
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, according to my book of thoughts
education
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 take part in the
development
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 of a nation partials, because there are numerous factors in the process of
development
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.
Firstly
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, the infrastructure of a
country
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 is the most important factor of a
country
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instead
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 of
education
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. Infrastructure plays a vital role in the progression of a
people
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person
,
such
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 as road, dames, and buildings are the important elements in
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development
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developing
. According to a school of thought, those countries whose infrastructure are good these nations are called developed countries, these countries are France, Italy, and German.
In addition
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, the
second
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 most important factor is skilled labour.Artists plays vital role in the progression of a nation.If in the developing
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country there
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country, there
 are lack of skilled persons,
then
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 these countries cannot develop. To exemplify, it is reported that the
development
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 of China is due to skilled labour.The artist of China takes their
country
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 from underdeveloped to developed.
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, not only
education
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 take part in the progression of a nation, but there are
also
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 a number of other factors for
development
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.
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