Many peoples for natural beauties like sea beaches mountain and lakes. Do people are responsible for that? what should be done to stop people to spoil natural beauty? give reasons and example for your answer.

Natural beauty is a gift of God and it is
also
considered to be
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of the ecosystem. Which means related damage to it may have detrimental effects on the environment. Nowadays, plenty of people
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the scenic views of
this
natural site. There are numerous reasons behind it and
also
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. Both reasons and
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in
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paragraphs. To commence with, tourism is the core reason to despoil the beauty of scenic sites
such
as mountains,
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beaches. Tourism is an inevitable part of every
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economy and
as a result
of it as
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as
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people visit
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renowned
places
and
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it
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by
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their throwaway culture. Apart from that deforestation, responsible for that as deforestation is employed for infrastructure and urbanization, which may imbalance
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. To quote an example, in
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approximately 30 to 40
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trees
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been cut down
due to
urbanization and
as a result
of
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its
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natural cycle is disturbed and forest
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very common in America. On the other side, to
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all the
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there are numerous
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. First and foremost one is that a government should
pose
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strict rules and regulations on
such
places
.
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, collecting heavy penalties from both
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tourists
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and tourist
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operators
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by
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damaging the property.
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government can organise an awareness campaign to teach about maintaining the originality of the
places
. You ensure that it will be a success
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and only if people take part in it very seriously without it all in vain.
To sum up
,
Tourism
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industry is booming
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and it is the main reason for contaminating
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view of
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places
. Paradoxically, it can be
also
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by
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as well as
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the government
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.

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