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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation

#people #work #company #organisation
Self-employment is today very popular trend
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rather than for others.But the main question is:"Why is it so?Why people choose to take the risk?".In
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the development such trend
such
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,there were more than million companies worldwide in 20th Century which had started like "Coca-Cola" or "McDonalds
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however, it
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,if people would underestimate the risks of self-employment.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • job satisfaction
  • financial risk
  • irregular income
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement plans
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