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Some people think that universities should provide graduate with the knowledge and the skills needed in the workplace. Other think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What is your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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So, according to the opinions of some individual teaching institutes need to teach the actual work that a graduate is supposed to do in his job after graduating,
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 other thinks that institutes need to give information according to the curriculum which they think is best irrespective of whether it can be useful or not in the work after study.
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 will talk about the importance of providing main information, because ninety percent of individuals do graduations for the purpose of doing work in a company or self business, so it is of utmost importance to give information which will be helpful to the students after passing out.
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, nowadays there have been a compulsory one semester of industrial training provided to ensure that students get exposure required,
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 which will help them in understanding and adjusting better with that culture.
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, if we talk about going with curriculum, and if they are not sure whether it will help or not after completing their studies,
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 it's a paradoxical situation for the schooling institute I believe.
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, a graduate student went on to give an interview, but he has no clue of what a potential employer is asking because he has not learnt any relevant thing from his study
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 his time of degree goes in vain in the actual sense. So to conclude, I will restate that all teaching places should focus on their applications of the curriculum rather than going with already running traditional system, which doesn't care about its use. Because it will be the main crux of the whole studying, and
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 only it will be of some use to the student.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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