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Some people claim that what people eat in many Western countries is unhealthy and that their diet is getting worse .Critics say that these countries should change their diet. What are your opinion on this?

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Some percentage of people complain about what citizens eat in many countries which are located on the West side is unhealthy,
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 gets worse every time.While, kickers recommend that some countries ought to change their
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 is getting worse.
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, it is not so easy to change their
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. Because, humans who use live in some the Western countries are famous for their holidays and national
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 which is likely to contain s
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 their generation, would feel themselves much better,
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 would prevent the spread of different kinds of infections diseases that are actively d
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 for their well condition,
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esides it can overcome some dreadful usefulness. From the reasons and my opinion, which were written by me it can be concluded that, if the Western population include more vegetables and fruits, it would change their
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 for the better.

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