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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

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It is often said that people
goes
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go
 to
college
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 and universities for several purposes as for new experiences, Career preparation and so on.
Besides
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this
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 I think there have more courses for attending university or colleges.
For
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From
In
Since
 the very beginning I think people go to
Educational institution
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an educational institution
an Educational institution
 for
improve
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improving
improved
 their thinking style and
also
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for get
dismiss from the mind; stop remembering
forget
 a good job like those
reason
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reasons
 there have more other reason
Actually in
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Actually, in
college
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 and university there goes three types of people
,
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,
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first type
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the first type
 of people goes there for studying,
Last
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 but not the least who teach student they
also
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 goes there and in the end will work over there they
also
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 goes
.
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.
I mean the security guards cleaners
,
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,
like worker people But
,
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,
Most of the people who
goes
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go
 to
college
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 and universities they are actually attached
with
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to
 education. I can see the main reason of going to
college
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 are University is learning In conclusion I can say that I think people go to
college
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 and in adversity is for learning and
also
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 can say that they goes there to become a good human being
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