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The best way to educate children is by using the internet in every lesson. To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

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Deploying the
internet
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 in education can provide students with up-to-date sources of information.
However
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, there are other possible
sollutions
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solutions
solution
 that would appear to be more effective rather than the
internet
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
 of teaching lessons using the
internet
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 and provide some alternatives.
First
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 of all, using the
internet
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 constantly during lesson might lead students to addiction. With
this
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 said, many of them could rely on only the
internet
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 and
thus
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this
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 method would cause them to use only the
internet
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 rather than printed books.
In addition
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, it might bring about some health-related problems
on
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in
 children,
such
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 as eye disorders, which
disencourage
try to prevent; show opposition to
discourage
 students to study.
Therefore
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, the
internet
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 could not be the best way in
educatong
give an education to
educating
 process. Turning to viable alternatives, probably the most
effevtive
producing or capable of producing an intended result or having a striking effect
effective
 would be to
intoduce
cause to come to know personally
introduce
 multi-sensory tactics
such
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 as games, puzzles. Via
this
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 method, they can spend their time being energized, which encourages pupils to comprehend themes well. Another possible option would be to organize more recreational activities
such
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 as
school trip
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a school trip
school trips
, which would achieve in keeping them interested in
subjects
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the subjects
. Unlike the
internet
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 that provides visual information, understanding any kind of subject through nature would be much more fascinating for
schoolchildren
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school children
.
This
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also
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 helps encourage them to learn more. In conclusion,
although
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 teaching lessons via the
internet
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 might be seen one of the best tactics, it would not be the most
effevtive
producing or capable of producing an intended result or having a striking effect
effective
 option. Introducing multi-sensory process
to
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of
 lesson and organizing
schools
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school
 trips, which assist teachers in encouraging students to study, seem to be more helpful in education.

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