Nowadays some professionals such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries?

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The people wonder why some employees get more salary than others.

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question divides these people into two campuses, the proponent said and the

opponent

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opponent's

side

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. The supportive

side

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says that these employees spent their life to become an old hand in their field, so they should receive some financial appreciation. The other

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sees

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is a type of discrimination against blue-collar jobs. It seems clear that there are reasons behind

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situation coming through several rationale aspects

relateing

make a logical or causal connection

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to their skills and majors.

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, it is not surprising that in comparison with

laborer

someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor

labourer

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, white-collar jobs get a higher an income for logical reasons.

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Firstly

, the doctors or the engineers studied hardly, and they deprive

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from an entertainment.

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, they become

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more specialized

more specialised

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reason, if they faced

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a problem

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, they would be more creative to solve it based on their acknowledgements.

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, there is a competition among companies to hire these type of people, so

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competition increases a demand for

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type of worker. That leads their salaries to become a high.

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can explain by saying that according to

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the law

of demand, if the demand is high, the price increases.

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kind of worker did receive

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the incentive

an incentive

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, it would decrease

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kind of people.

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When

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happens, the world will suffer from insufficient of the doctors and the engineers.

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, it would cause to health issues, and destroy an industrial

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act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

. These compelling

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reasons

would convince the

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opposite

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, there are

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

jobs are neglected financially, and

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the act of acquiring something

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low salaries. Even though these jobs play an intrinsic role in our country, these did not get efficient money.

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, the teacher who care about bringing up the

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generation works twice. He works in his school to explain

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his students, and he squanders his time in his house in order to prepare his classes. In conclusion, it is apparent that there are

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different

between the workers through their aggregate income, but

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interpretes

understood in a certain way; made sense of

interpreted

by several notions

relateing

make a logical or causal connection

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to professional skills and a rivalry among companies.

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, there are still some jobs require a high effort, but these

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jobs, lower

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salaries

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as the teacher.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

370 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Compensation
Expertise
Income disparity
Societal contribution
Automation
Scarcity
Market dynamics
Infrastructure
Professional ethics
Economic disparity
Undervalued
Meritocracy
Vocational skill
Job market
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Nowadays some professionals such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries?

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