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Some people think that the media such as newspaper should be allowed to publish information of people’s private life. Others however, think that there should be controls to stop this media from publishing this kind of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, the size of families in some countries is not so large as they used to be.
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 phenomenon in the society. The main cause of
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 problem is that parents need to take good care of them in every aspect of life.
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good schools
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 and providing a good quality of life or meeting their daily demands.
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 on society in a various ways. One positive effect is that nuclear families decline directly population as less number of family members means less population. To illustrate, countries like Canada have increased number of nuclear and lone parent families
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parenting
 and living far from their joint family.

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