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Band 7

The governments should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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 many people believe that, the administration should give an order to prohibit the manufacturing industries that produce poisonous misuse materials without having their own dumping treatment
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 to help to protect our climate. I support
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 large extent for some reasons. My position is argued
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 with explanations. Out of all the causes, the foremost one is dangerous
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 noxious will have an effect on the people who get in contact with them.
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, workers
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 get affected by
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 toxic because companies don't give any protection to employees.
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, in 2001 chemical industry launch in Mumbai that firm hire all countryside labourers, but staff members aren't getting any defence
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 and
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 not have any
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 discarded
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, so they affect by the varieties of chemical and
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, mankind started different types of diseases
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 as tuberculosis, chest pain and lung cancer.
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, there is a plethora of lakes and river that are being polluted for the reasons of financial income.
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, by will
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 environment gets affected, but citizens only focused on profits and investments.
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 to
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, without having the junk treatment
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 all poisonous
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 materials mixed with the air and spoil our climate. Because of
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 forest
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 get affected. So government should take strict action against them.
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, in 2015 world wildlife reported the river and lakes in Asia were polluted due to companies throw the
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 disposal in the river.
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, protect the environment day by day increasing. In recent times, numbers of factories installed the toxic treatment, because they concerned about their punishing companies that abuse the ecosystem.
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, Co-operation should encourage mankind to create the foundation they help to protect our nature. To conclude the discussion, it can be
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 commented that, punishment should be given those who pupils exploit the environment.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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