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Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets still, there are robberies that happens inside house .what do u think what is the best thing a person can do for safety?

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Nowadays
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bulgaries
entering a building unlawfully with intent to commit a felony or to steal valuable property
burglaries
 are increasing time to time. A majority of people feel insecure to go to the
places
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places, although
although
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 the
robbers
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robber
 attacks on their homes
also
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 In my opinion
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 individuals should be equipped their areas by latest technology
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 setting up the alarms and keep a pet as a dog. To embark with, to defence from
such
 unlikely incidents people should aware whenever they see any stranger whose behaviour seems abnormal
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 they should
enquiry
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enquire
 that person as well as they can inform the police if the condition is under
cantrol
power to direct or determine
control
. Apart from
this
individuals
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individual
 should
setting
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set
 up the alarms and cameras because when thieves can try to
broke
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break
 the lock they
caneasily
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can easily
 catch the robbers
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In addition
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 some places are hotspot of thefts
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 So it is duty of authority to hire the security guard who
do
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does
 the duty with honesty
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At
 midnight because many robberies
are happened
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are happening
happen
 at night
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Furthermore
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 folks can keep the pet
such
 as dog as
thry
people in general
they
 come to know the phenomenon before their
occurence
an event that happens
occurrence
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Morever
in addition
Moreover
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 they should not place the huge amount of money and jewellery at home. In conclusion
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 they should be cautious and help each other when the accidents happened
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 If they do all things that mentioned above, they can preserve themselves.

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