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some people believe that teenager should concentrate on all school subject, but other believe that teenager should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. discuss both side and give your opinion.

#people #teenager #school #focus #interest #side
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It is argued by some individual that
undergraduate
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undergraduates
an undergraduate
 should focus on all
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subject
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subjects
 while some people think they should choose those
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subject
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subjects
 in which they are good or have importance in. To embark on, many people think the undergraduate should learn all the
subject
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 which are set by the education board. Most of the
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student
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students
 have not the same abilities to explore about all the
subject
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that
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that's
 been taught to them, but learning all the
subject
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 will develop the
student
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 overall and learn a basic knowledge about the
subject
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 which might help them in their life. Learning all the
subject
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 will make
student
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 challenging and sharp which empowers them to know their capabilities.
On the other hand
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, every
student
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 has a
right
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 to choose their own
subject
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 in which they find
interest
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interesting
 or best in. Our fundamental
right
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 say's that
right
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 to choice which means each and every individual have a
right
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 to choice, finding their own interest will help
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student
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students
the student
 to know what they are good in and will improve their learning ability. We know that the
subject
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 in which we are interested are easy to learn and focus. Choosing their own
subject
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 will help them to know about their field they are interested. If
student
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 has their own choice of
subject
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 will help them to focus on their path and will not find any distraction. Learning all the subjects are little bit difficult and stressful because of which some students go into depression or some commit
suicide
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. Most of
suicide
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 are
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student
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students
a student
 who are not able to pass in exams and go of the depression and commit
suicide
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. Choosing interesting
subject
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 will help to reduce the chances of
suicide
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. So,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would conclude that learning all
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subject
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subjects
 will make
student
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 challenging and extraordinary while choosing the
subject
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 in which they are best in will help them to focus in their path and career. In my opinion
,
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,
 choosing interested
subject
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 will be the best option to know our own interest.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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