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In recent years, there has been a growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievements. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having such a society? Discuss both views, and give your views.

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Nowadays, there has been a profound debate between equality and achievements. Some people believe that every individual should be given equal
work
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 and salary in society, while others are against
this
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 view. I will discuss the
prons
in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)
pros
 and cons for valuing everyone equivalently.45 There
are
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is
 a plethora of reasons for viewing every individual equally.
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 with, every individual in society has its own personal knowledge and skills, the person lacking in the forefront without these resources and learning will
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 be viewed equally and given an equivalent job with
same
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the same
 earning.50
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, it will promote a better coordination among individuals. Many people who are knowledgeable and experienced will take
help
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the help
 of others to complete the given task,
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 creating unity among them. They will think and perform
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 as a team rather pin pointing ethical and socioeconomic issues among each other. 50
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, there are many disadvantages
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to
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 creating equality in every place.
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, as every individual is added to the same type of
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, focus of everyone is to achieve the quantity rather than checking the quality, it avoids the effort made by a genius.
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, as team effort is taken into consideration, person having new ideas and innovation avoid speaking his views on the topic.
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, the group societies
force
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forces
 every individual to perform the
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 as per the group rather as per their interest, leading to make them dumb.90 In hindsight, I opine that
their
in or at that place
there
 are many benefits for
egalitarian society
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an egalitarian society
, but its negative effects cannot be avoided.

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