Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable to deny that because of television many people are procrastinating on their precious time.
This
essay will explain why I completely agree that it makes us a couch
potatoes
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potato
, and
also
affects our networking skills. Television can make us
lathargic
deficient in alertness or activity
lethargic
.
This
might be
beause
for the reason that; on account of
because
, we are doing
low physical activity
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a low physical activity
and simply watching a content in one position for a long time, and
this
may
also
cause health problems.
For instance
, If a person does not exercise or does not have
adequte
having the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
adequate
physical movement, there is a high chance for encountering sugar problems in his bodies.
As a result
, he would require to take medicine to control it for
rest
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the rest
of your life, and eating restriction would
also
be imposed.
In contrast
, If he watches television in a balanced
manner
Accept comma addition
manner, then
then
such
issues may not arise. Not only that, more time being spent indoors watching videos would
also
hinder your social networking skills.
This
might lead to psychological issues and mood swings, which would
also
make communication hard with people with who have
such
detrimental habit.
Furthermore
, a person who is blocking his social life might not be aware of his surrounding
also
. Because of
this
, he may feel left out in his society.
This
feeling can
also
plummet his mental health. While I believe that not only watching television can make us low on energy due to suppressed physical work, it can
also
effect out social life and make us psychologically weak.

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