Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask other questions about the trip

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Dear sir, I am writing

this

letter to express my interest

for

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the

trip

to the USA which your school will organize

month. I would like to join my son and other students because

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of my

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hectic and busy schedule I would not able to go for our

pre plan

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trip

last

month. But,

month I have

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apply

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time so

this

is a great opportunity for me to spend some quality time with my family. As you know, that I frequently visit

USA

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the USA

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for business

purpose

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. So, I better know most of the cities, their hotels, foods and so on. I could pass some useful information to you and your staff during the

trip

However

, I do have two questions for you.

First

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is that "do we have to arrange accommodation facilities when we are staying in

USA

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the USA

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Second

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one is that "does any other parents are coming on

this

trip

"? I am waiting for your early reply and let me come on

this

trip

. Yours faithfully, Jack

Sun May 10 2020

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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6 paragraphs

169 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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