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Bringing in foreign workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should, therefore, be stopped. Do what extent do you agree with this?

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It is true that a number of migrant workers are increasing day by day around the whole world. Many people have grave concerns that, using immigrants to fill up some employment sections which apparently native people have not much interest in doing causes severe problems by decreasing a number of employment opportunities available for those people who live in small village and cities far away from major metropolis areas. I disagree with that statement because there are certain jobs that demand skills which can be filled by foreign workers. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some positive and negative point for bringing for bringing foreign folks.
First
 and foremost, there are certain job vaccines that require some special skills which can be easily filled by skilled foreign workers. It is win win policy for both foreign workers and native people. The local community gets support in terms of workforce as well as growth in business. To illustrate, a recent study showed by Toronto Univercity that some business in rural areas of Canada is successful with the help of many foreign workers and they never had a shortage of labour.
In addition
 to
this
, foreign labour can be considered as a cheap source of labour which is beneficial for the businesses profit. 
On the other hand
,
immigrantion
migration into a place (especially migration to a country of which you are not a native in order to settle there)
immigration
 has some negative consequences as well,
firstly
, foreign folks often come from the developing nation and they struggle a lot to make money. Most of time they are not loyal due to money matter. If they get better opportunities they can switch
there
of them or themselves
their
 jobs.
Secondly
, it's
fact
Suggestion
the fact
a fact
 that wages are driven down due to
huge availability
Suggestion
the huge availability
 of foreign workers. Therefor, local community refuses to work and show less interest in jobs because wages below
powerty line
Suggestion
the poverty line
poverty line
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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