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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. how to do you think this statement is? what measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars.

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, most of cities are suffering from transportation issues due to numbers of wagon are increasing every day.
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in
Suggestion
In
 addition, some cities like Bombay have long traffic jam for many hours.
authority
Suggestion
Authority
 can try to control with various
ways but
Accept comma addition
ways, but
 without citizens help and awareness, it is handicapped I will explain it in
further
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 paragraph. Before three decades, machine owners were considered as a royal family member and it was too much costly. People were satisfied with their lifestyle even wealthier family
also
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 tried to skip
purchase
Suggestion
the purchase
 of
wagon
Suggestion
the wagon
a wagon
. There had less advanced automobile on the road so people were less suffered from
influx
Suggestion
an influx
the influx
 for pollution problems. Today, every family will adjust van requirement in their basic needs,
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further more
in addition
furthermore
, in the race of showing standard they buy more costly and spare
car
Use synonyms
 for
family
Suggestion
the family
. No-one ready to compromise with comfort zone so they use own
car
Use synonyms
 to travel and avoid sharing with other. As sometime public transport is not only
crowded but
Accept comma addition
crowded, but
also
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 less frequent, commuter
choose
Suggestion
chooses
 to use person vehicle.
traffic
Suggestion
Traffic
 issue is spread
worldwide so
Accept comma addition
worldwide, so
 every government
try
Suggestion
tries
 different ways to solve problem like increase tax, permit drive
car
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odd even
Accept comma addition
odd, even
 wise, charge
higher panelty
Suggestion
higher penalties
higher penalty
a higher penalty
 whenever any rule break and many more.
For example
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, government of Delhi
arrange
Suggestion
arranges
 days as per
car
Use synonyms
's number odd or even with the help of these people need to use public transport or sharing
vehicle
Suggestion
a vehicle
the vehicle
 with friends. Old construction does not have enough parking space and recklessness parking is always
also
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 a big reason of traffic. I conclude that, ministry can take strict action to solve the issue, but without public support and awareness, we cannot get acquired result public should try to avoid unnecessary practice of boat.
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