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Several languages die every year. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that a world with fever languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyse both sides and provide your opinion.

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Many languages around the
world
 die every year, often replaced with more widely spoken dialects. Opinions as to whether
this
 is a positive or negative trend are mixed. On one hand, people feel sharing a common
language
 may help to encourage economical development in the
world
.
However
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However, on
on the other hand
, many feel the closing of languages is a negative trend that makes it increasingly difficult to trace humanity’s heritage. Both of these accounts will be examined before a conclusion is reached. As many attest, the global adoption of a single
language
 can do a lot in promoting economical development.
For example
, all export companies in China hire English speaking people to help them communicate with foreign buyers. The growth in trade that comes
as a result
 of
this
 effort to speak the
world
’s
language
 does a lot to create jobs and industries around the
world
.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 can be understood why many people support
this
 point of view.
However
, other people would argue that the rapid reduction of the
world
’s languages is making it increasingly hard to trace where and how people evolved.
For example
, during colonial times, many lesser spoken African languages were replaced with English, French and Dutch.
This
 phenomenon has understandably caused major problems for modern day historians, as these older and forgotten languages render many of the recovered historical records and artefacts indecipherable. After analysing both sides of
this
 argument, it is felt that more good comes from the global adoption of a single
language
 than the preservation and practice of older languages.
Thus
, it is hoped the
world
 continues to move towards a single, standardized linguistic system.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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