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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self employed?

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Nowadays, people
tends
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tend
 to be
work
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working
 from home or NOMAD as they would
called
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call
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 as. From the major change in
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 came from globalization where people
has made
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have made
 a rapid change on how people's lifestyles which have great influenced on their working habits as well. We may discuss
further
 more on the influences of
this
 tends along with the negative
side
 of
this circumstances
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these circumstances
this circumstance
. The main key from
this
 came from the Globalization where there are accessible to
majority
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the majority
 of
informations
a message received and understood
information
 within reach. People could access to numerous of resources
alongs
with a forward motion
along
 with knowledge just
on
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to
internet
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the internet
 itself and
this
 is why people
tends
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tend
 to choose to be self-employed due to freedom along with
get
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getting
 paid at the same time.
Eventhough
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Even though
, self-employed could be so catchy in terms of freedom that they
will gets
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will get
, but on the negative
side
 of
this
 comes from the time management. You may have all the freedom in your
hands but
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hands, but
 if you mishandle
this advantages
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these advantages
this advantage
 it could turn out to be
disaster
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disastrous
 for you. Due to that you may
postponing
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postpone
 all the work without getting it done
on
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in
 the time frame. Self-employed may be plus
side
 or slope
side
 is depend on how a person handle and manage with it.

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