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Some believe that tourism benefits the host country in many ways but others disagree with this opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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Nowadays visiting different countries become very popular among people, and its range is increasing, even among young people. Some people argue that
tourism
 is advantageous to the host country, while others disagree with
this
 opinion. In
this
 essay I intend to discuss both perspectives. On the one hand, some people argue that
tourism
 has benefits for the host country.The most obvious advantage of
tourism
 plays a key role in economic growth by providing job opportunities, encouraging regional development, increasing foreign exchange earnings, and enhancing higher standard of living for local communities. Another positive point of
tourism
 is that travelling promotes higher quality and life standards of local people,
such
 as building roads, railways, hospital and hotels, as well as
this
, constructing entertaining places.
As a result
 the quality of local people is quite likely to increase.
On the other hand
, others claim that it can
also
 be disadvantageous. Worryingly, the most serious threat is environmental damages like pollution, littering, loss of natural habitats. Even if tourists would behave responsibly, but they can cause
such
 demonstrations
such
 as air pollution by using transportation, as the government builds hotels, and entertaining places like parks and cinemas or theatres it is highly likely to cause loss of natural habitats. Another negative aspect is that tourists can unconsciously disrespect local people and traditions,
such
 as refusing to follow local dressing standards, behaving rudely towards local people. In a nutshell, I believe that
tourism
 has both positive and negative points for the host country,
however
 advantages can outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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