The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams compare two different types of
energy
-producing devices that are designed to work with
water
and
wind
.
The
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water
is the main source of the first device for manufacturing
the
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energy
,
whereas
wind
is crucial for the
second
energy
producer.
Therefore
, both devices are located in different places:
water-
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the water-energy
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energy
machine
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the
water
and the
wind
is on the side of the mountain. Compare to the
wind
-
energy
machine, the structure of the
water
one is relatively complicated.
According to
the picture of it, the powerful waves causes to generate
energy
.
Consequently
, generated
energy
from the intense work of ventilators passes to the outside to be stored.
In contrast
to the aforementioned device, the working system of the
wind
machine is not clear. based on the picture, the only available information is that as higher
waves
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are, as larger
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the output and costs for installation of the wave-
energy
machines.
Overall
, both types of electric generators are essential for producing
energy
for human consumption. As a human, we should wisely use natural resources to save our lives and nature.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, wind, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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