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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams compare two different types of
energy
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-producing devices that are designed to work with
water
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 and
wind
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.
The
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Water
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water
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 is the main source of the first device for manufacturing
the
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apply
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energy
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,
whereas
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wind
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 is crucial for the
second
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energy
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 producer.
Therefore
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, both devices are located in different places:
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water-
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the water-energy
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energy
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machine
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in
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 the
water
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 and the
wind
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 is on the side of the mountain. Compare to the
wind
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-
energy
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 machine, the structure of the
water
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 one is relatively complicated.
According to
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 the picture of it, the powerful waves causes to generate
energy
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.
Consequently
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, generated
energy
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 from the intense work of ventilators passes to the outside to be stored.
In contrast
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 to the aforementioned device, the working system of the
wind
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 machine is not clear. based on the picture, the only available information is that as higher
waves
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the waves
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 are, as larger
is
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the output and costs for installation of the wave-
energy
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 machines.
Overall
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, both types of electric generators are essential for producing
energy
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 for human consumption. As a human, we should wisely use natural resources to save our lives and nature.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, wind, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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