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Some believe that charitable organizations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based.

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In many countries, there are many charitable trusts that help a human being in an emergency situation. While some believe that these trusts should aid in those deprived areas where they belong to, I agree with those who think that they should provide assistance to any
part
 of the
country
 regardless where they are from. On the one hand, it is thought by some that charitable organizations must look after those areas where they belong.
This
 is because its citizen pay taxes and it is their right that
such
 an amount of tax is utilized for its
country
 rather than another
part
 of the
world
.
This
 results in the reduction of the crime rate.
For instance
, in Afghanistan, some local non-profit organization provides the books to some children in order to support their education.
Hence
, if
such
 organizations did not support
such
 low-class children by providing them with books and other stationary, there would be an increase in the percentage of illiteracy.
On the other hand
, there are some who argue that these charitable organisations must provide their assistance to any
part
 of the
world
 no matter where they live. As they think that we all are human and living on the same planet, so it is our primary responsibility to help each other in an emergency situation.
For example
, due to global warming, many animals were suffering and died in the burning of Amazon forest; in order to regrow all the trees and create again the natural habitat for those animals a large amount was required. It was the support of other NGOs’ from all over the
world
, the local charitable
trust
 was able to afford the fund and creating the same environment.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the pressure on the local charitable
trust
 would be less and they can look after another local area where their utmost attention is required. In conclusion,
although
 there are different views, whether charitable trusts should look after their
country
, I believe that
such
trust
 must help mankind from any
part
 of the
world
 in an emergency regardless of where they are, resulting in the local
trust
 to look after another deprived area in its
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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