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People doing dangerous sports activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not rescue their lives to save people doing these sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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Individuals performing sporting activities that involve high risk of injuries
such
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 as a rope jumping and a scuba diver should take care of their own lives and rescue teams should not get involved in danger by saving them.
This
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 essay disagrees with
this
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 statement because people get injured accidentally and every human life is important.
Firstly
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, no one is doing extreme sports in order to get hurt. If we think about high adrenaline activities, all of them involve some level of a risk and no one is doing them with an intention to get involved in an accident. Even though participants get the highest level of a protection, there is a high chance to make a mistake.
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, the rescue teams should be able to provide a support. Recent research concluded that only 1 percent of all injuries in these sports are life
dangering
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 and require
speical
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
special
 teams in order to help.
On the other hand
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, the value and importance of any existing human life cannot be questioned. The law and moral duty of every citizen is to provide a help if someone is in a trouble.
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to
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To
 aforementioned duties, the rescue job requires those working there to provide a help to all people that need it. A recent study found that 90% of workers want to provide their services to those in need despite what was the cause of it. To conclude, any humans deserve the
same right to
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same right
recieve
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Receive
Recieve
 a help in an emergency no matter what was the culprit of it and there is always a probability that something can go wrong even if all the prerequisites were fulfilled.

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