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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that university students must pursue careers depending on their interests, while others say that they should study only careers related to science and technology. I believe that it is more beneficial to let them choose their careers because it allows them to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their
dreams avoiding
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dreams, avoiding
 job dissatisfaction and improve the
economy
 of their countries. On the one hand, some argue that students should always be enrolled in professions related to science and technology because of the better opportunities in the labour market.
As a result
, it enables them to obtain higher salaries than the rest of careers.
For instance
,
this
 was illustrated in a recent New York Times article that highlighted that 85% of students in developing countries chose careers related to science
such
 as Medicine and Engineering based on salaries. Despite
this
, I would argue that those professionals have high levels of job dissatisfaction.
On the other hand
, it is thought that letting students pursue careers depending on their likes result in benefits not only for them but
also
 for the
economy
 of their nations.
In other words
, if there are more artists and musicians in a place, there will be more attractions which will increase their income. To exemplify, it has been proven, particularly in Ireland, the
first
 country to introduce a nationwide plan of support students to follow artistic careers depending on their interests.
As a result
, the number of attractions increased which attracted more tourists than before and the
economy
 improved by almost 10%. I,
therefore
, believe that it is preferable to let students choose their careers. In conclusion,
although
 scientific careers allow students to have high salaries and job opportunities, it is better to let them pursue careers based on their interests which will have a positive impact on them and the
economy
 of their countries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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