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In many countries, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the household tasks equally. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Over recent years, more and more people have been attending a discussion as regards to distribution of homemaking duties. One side says there should be equal task density for both men and
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 others argue that
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 have to do housekeeping work
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 of men despite their job responsibilities. I would argue that I completely agree with the given idea for a number of plausible reasons. On the one hand, it is obvious that if a person has a full-time job and career activity, there is not enough time to do all
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chores
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,
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 as cleaning, cooking, ironing and so on regardless of gender.
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 the Eurasian Statistics Institute,
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 working person in Azerbaijan comes home around 7:30 PM, and it is even impossible considering
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 have to do all
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 duties after work. Meanwhile,
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 working and life schedule can dramatically harm
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's mental well-being.
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, it should be the moral responsibility of husbands to divide
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chores
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 fairly.
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, another reason is that we need to keep and protect the rights of
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 and to improve them as much as possible. In my point of view, putting all
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chores
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 on
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's shoulders would be a violation of moral rights, not only that but
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 not supporting
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, at least those in your family can damage your family relationships and the deep feelings between you.
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, supporting
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 and distributing
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 duties equally would reduce both the unrightful actions of
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 and the job satisfaction of full-time working
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. In conclusion, considering the aforementioned arguments,
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 as the responsibility of marriage and protecting
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's rights, I have come to the summing up that men and
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 have to share the
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chores
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 equally.
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