A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?
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and benefit from tourism
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travelers
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travellers
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the economy
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and natural
developted
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developed
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such
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tourism
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lose
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loss
jobs
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a crucial
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measured
tourism
sustainable development that can reduce disadvantages and increase advantages.Submitted by ashisaxena2416 on
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