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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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standard
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higher
 than in the past,
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 are not only enough material needs but
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satisfactions
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satisfaction
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 needs
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 as entertainment,
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and travel
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. ..
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 why
tourism
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 is one of
smokeless
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industry
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industries
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 as a main source of income for a lot of countries.
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, it has the advantages and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of
tourism
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 in
modern
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world
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. I completely think that the
befefits
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benefits
 of
tourism
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outweight
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outweigh
 its drawbacks. [Excellent introduction] The first
advantage
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 of
tourism
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 is natural resources
on
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 the
world
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 that are very
variety
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 and abundant. A lot of Attractions were recognized as a
world
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 cultural heritage by UNESCO.
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statue
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a statue
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US
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the US
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,
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 Wall in China, Ha Long Bay in Vietnam, etc .
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 beautiful landscapes,
tranitional
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traditional
transitional
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village
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villages
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 and
festival
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festivals
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 were held everywhere in the
world
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.
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, Bat Trang
pottery
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Village
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 in Vietnam, Windmill
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village
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 in Netherlands, Marsaxlokk fishing
village
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 in Malta, etc. The local people get more
jobs
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 and benefit from
tourism
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. [ You talked about
jobs
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, benefits and cultural awareness (
advantage
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) ] The second
advantage
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 of
tourism
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, it has an encouraging development policy from
government
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the government
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 because of its effects on
economy
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the economy
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, environment, culture and
social
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society
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. Many
transpostation
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transportation
 constructions and
playground
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playgrounds
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 were built
such
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 as bridges, tunnels,
slings
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and slings
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 in cities and
suburban
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suburbs
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. Convenient in traffic,
travelers
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travellers
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 easily go outside with low expenses. [
Advantage
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 is
effect
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the effect
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 on
economy
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the economy
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]
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, many relics, heritage,
natural
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and natural
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 resources were conserved and
developted
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developed
.
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Also
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 a lot of events of
tourism
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 were organized and advertised everywhere in
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the exhibition
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exhibition
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exhibitions
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, on
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the internet
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internet
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 and
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on tivision
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tivision
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television
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other
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the other
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 hand, the 4.0
tecnology
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technology
 era is booming. Travelers easily check interesting places,
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and booking
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booking
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book
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 tickets and hotels
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also
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online before traveling.
Tourism
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 service companies will easily connect with potential
customer
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customers
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thourght
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thought
through
 booking apps and other channels on
internet
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the internet
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 like
facebook
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,
instagram
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, etc… [
advantage
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 is
ease
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the ease
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 of booking and planning ]
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, it has some disadvantages of
tourism
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in
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apply
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nowadays
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 as economic crisis, disease and natural calamities. If local people
depends
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depend
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 on
tourism
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 only, they will
loss
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lose
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jobs
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 and fall into
difficult
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a difficult
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sintuation
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situation
situations
. In
addtion
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addition
, environmental protection depends on
awareness
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the awareness
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 of people.
Ecosystem
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wil
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will
 be broken and increase
environment
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environmental
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 pollution if tourists crowd and lack
of
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apply
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awareness. [Disadvantage :
lose
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loss
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jobs
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of jobs
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 and pollute the environment ]
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,
tourism
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 is
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in national economic development so it should be
meansured
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measured
 to do
tourism
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 sustainable development that can reduce disadvantages and increase advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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