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Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem.

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The counting of the trees is
decling
grow worse
declining
 very rapidly. The modern man is
great danger
Suggestion
a great danger
 to maintain the flora and fauna. In my piece of writing, I shall shed light on the various reasons behind
this
 trend along with their harmful effects and their remedies. More importantly, with the population explosion, the masses need more space for residential area. To illustrate, the increases number of the people
uplift
Suggestion
uplifts
 the demand of the houses. So, the people clean the forests to convert into the living place. Apart from
this
, in the recent show off time period
,
Accept space
,
 the consumption of the wood swings up in many decorative products which
automaticaly
in a reflex manner
automatically
 swore up the consumption of the trees. On turning to the effects and solutions side,
firstly
 the
diming
a particular environment or walk of life
domain
dimming
 quantity of plants
unlock
Suggestion
unlocks
 the door of many harmful gasses and global warming is
best example
Suggestion
the best example
 of increases the pollution in
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. To control on it, the government should implement hard rules in the favour of forest protection.
Secondly
, the dwindling units of green creatures
also
 cause extreme
temperature which
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temperature, which
 is harmful for an agriculture
also
. The higher authorities should aware the human beings about the drastic effects of decreasing trees by following various movements
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion, the administration should dig deep to control on cutting down of the trees by
awaring
a grant made by a law court
awarding
 them with the help of various methods.
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